I really want to start the story with Seymour at the beach with Sybil and spend some time developing their relationship.

I’m especially excited to illustrate the Bananafish! I really like the idea of seeing what Sybil sees when Seymour is describing them. Maybe in a story format, but I’m also considering making them really charming and beautiful.

I think also at the end, I may cut out the scene in the elevator completely and just show him walking towards the room. Then when he gets to the room, I think I would want his wife to be sleeping still but somehow I want to show that she’s caring and sweet (different from the story where she’s annoying). Maybe also find a way to establish he was in the war during this scene so people can see why he’s a little messed up (maybe include a close-up of his dog tags at the beach?). I think this way his death will still come as a surprise because the story is so sweet, but people will be able to go back and understand that it was due to the PTSD.

The story will sort of end up being more like what happens in celebrity culture. It’s often the ones that appear happiest and make other people laugh that end up being the most depressed.